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i love the way your hair smells after we've stood outside in the rain,
watching the half-frozen slush slowly surpass our feet. i love how
warm you are to me when we've come inside after the sky fades
from lavender to listen to the uneven sound of wind against the house.
we feel so small and safe inside something that sounds so frail.

you're gentle like butterflies against my skin. against me.
you're floral and something sweeter, like honeydew dripping
down my chin. down my arms.
just lay here with me for a while.

i'll tuck your hair behind your ear and tell you it's alright. tell you
you're my infinity. with nighttime skyline eyes. and in your hair
there's butterflies, they're silently sleeping, quietly breathing
in your ear about dreams.

and when you murmur my name in the dark,
i'll fall in love with you all over again.
just something i put together over last night and today. not sure if i like it, since i didn't work too hard on it.
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AnimeGirl513 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014
This is really beautiful with all of it's romance. Not too many people are able to capture the romance here that you capture. It's purely wonderful!
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2010
"i'll tuck your hair behind your ear and tell you it's alright."

pretty heartwarming. :heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2010  Professional Photographer
hehe, thanks. :aww:
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YelianaYella Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2010
and in your hair
there's butterflies, they're silently sleeping, quietly breathing
in your ear about dreams.

and when you murmur my name in the dark,
i'll fall in love with you all over again.

My fav part :) Your amazing
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2010  Professional Photographer
thank youuu.
you're sweet.
:heart:
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YelianaYella Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010
and again your amazing ^^, :heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2010  Professional Photographer
:heart:
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stormclouds-gather Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010
you're gentle like butterflies against my skin. against me.

I love that line. :)
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2010  Professional Photographer
thank you very much. :heart:
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BlackeningMist Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
ur description is wonderful:heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2009  Professional Photographer
thank you. :hug:
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DemonXIII Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2009
ok so you write too? (and write well i should add) that's not really fair is it?
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2009  Professional Photographer
hehe, i wrote before i did photography. :P
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DemonXIII Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2009
hmm...either way it's not fair :P
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2009  Professional Photographer
heheh. :meow:
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Lyrica-Lee Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
awww... :aww: this is like a fairytale.. beautifully portrayed!
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2009  Professional Photographer
thanks. :D
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AndrewMackenzi Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2009
very nice! :)
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2009  Professional Photographer
thank you~
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gumy-bear Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2009
This is exactly how I feel.
you've captured some deep emotions and I just love it.:3
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2009  Professional Photographer
aw, really? that's wonderful that you feel this.
thank you. :heart:
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kingmaitland Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2009
I think this is fantastic, really love the last bit too, n don't worry if u didn't feel like u put enough effort into it, just shows u how creative u r n poems can sometimes be more natural with less effort :)
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2009  Professional Photographer
aw, well thank you. (:
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katt92 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2009
I'm not one that reads poetry that much but that is gorgeous... :heart:

x k.
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2009  Professional Photographer
aw, well thank you! :hug:
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xcaroline Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009
it's beautiful. :heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009  Professional Photographer
thank you~
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BlueFairy-07 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. I don't think it's simple at all though - even though the sentences may be short, the descriptions you use are so complex - and beautiful! They seem to describe the emotions exactly, but in words I'd never be able to find.

So thank you for putting my feelings into words. :heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
Aw, thank you. That means a lot to me. :heart:
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cynicalanimal Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
holly!!! :D beautiful!! its all so similar to what i whisper down my girlfriend's ear at night :) but a lot more beautiful.. uv said things that iv always wanted to say to her but never knew how...
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
aw, thanks! that's lovely. (:
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Walk2Moonz Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
wow... story of my life..<3
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
lucky you. (:
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Walk2Moonz Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
:) ah but were a beautiful distaster. great writing :)
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009  Professional Photographer
:aww:
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Walk2Moonz Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009
8-)
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mehrmeer Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
Beautiful :heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
thank you~
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Midgarwolf Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
The butterflies whispering is an interesting image, very evocative and the frail house seeming safe but barely standing against the winds, there's something fleeting and transient about that...

It seems quite conflicted, as though there is a moment of doubt, then tossed aside by interaction with your subject.

It made me think, which is enough in my book.

Nice work
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
thank you for the wonderful comment. it's good to hear someone's really think about my writing. :huggle:
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Midgarwolf Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2009
No problem, keep it coming
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caimito Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009
beautiful, simple, lovely
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
thanks~ <3
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009  Student Writer
i love it (: it's simple, but...beautifully written (: :heart:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
thanks bunches. (:
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Student Writer
welcome! (:
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TheSnowInMyHand Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2009
This is a lot like love. :heart:

Exactly like it. Or, as it should be.
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
Aw, thanks! :hug:
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TheSnowInMyHand Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009
You are welcome. :)

Thank you, for your beautiful words. :hug:
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Zaratops Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2009  Professional Photographer
:heart:
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